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The following discussion is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: promoted by PFHLai (talk) 11:10, 23 September 2012 (UTC)

Jordan Anderson

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Jordan Anderson

  • Reviewed: Ray Long
  • Comment: Hook seems wordy, I'd appreciate suggestions. I also happen to love the "Say howdy to George Carter, and thank him for taking the pistol from you when you were shooting at me" line but I'm not sure it can really go in the hook.

Created/expanded by Roscelese (talk), Green Cardamom (talk). Nominated by Roscelese (talk) at 05:50, 9 September 2012 (UTC)

Or "..his wife and self?" Not sure of the proper grammar, or if needed. Jordan in the letter asked for 32 years for himself and 20 years for his wife. -- Green Cardamom (talk) 01:51, 12 September 2012 (UTC)

Article was nominated on Sept 9 - so getting all technical the expansion should've started on Sept 4. Counting it that way, it satisfies the x5 criteria. Article wise everything checks out. I guess the only question is the hook. I would go with:

The article says 52 years so I'm sticking with that (readers can read the article and learn that it was for Jordan and his wife). Also, not counting the "pictured" this alt fits within the length requirement.

 Volunteer Marek  06:49, 23 September 2012 (UTC)

I like your hook suggestion. I'm also fine with not specifying the 32/20 breakdown of the back pay. –Roscelese (talkcontribs) 07:05, 23 September 2012 (UTC)
Good hook. --Green Cardamom (talk) 07:59, 23 September 2012 (UTC)