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GA Review

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 14:52, 3 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]


Will do this soon. JAGUAR  14:52, 3 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Initial comments

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  • "The film originally written in Tamil" - Originally written in Tamil, the film
 Done
  • The middle two paragraphs in the lead definitely need to be merged into one
 Done
  • "The film is about how Jagannathan a young politician from India" - how about The film revolves around Jagannathan, a young politician from India and his transition to chief political adviser or something like that. The sentence has no breaks and is very choppy
 Done
  • United States is linked twice in lead
 Done
  • "Sunny is forced to consult a third person's advise and calls Francis Kunjappan" - sounds like an actual third person here. How about Sunny is forced to consult advice from a third person and calls Francis Kunjappa
 Done
  • "US" is linked twice in the Plot. The first instance of "US" should be changed to just "United States", and the second "US" delinked
 Done
  • "They gives a message to Sunny" - give
 Done
  • " but is not revealed that from where he got it" - I don't get this. Is it meant to be like but it is not revealed where he got it?
This means, it is not revealed on that scene, it is later shown on climax scene when, Jagannathan calls Sunny and reveals backstage dramas which occurred last night.
  • "Meanwhile, Jagannathan and his pals returns to India" - informal. Use 'friends'
 Done
  • "About the unique title, "The term Peruchazhi" - a colon is needed instead of a comma
 Done
  • Europe is linked twice in the Release section. Does it even need to be linked?
 Done
  • " in google play store in September 2014" - needs capitalisation
 Done
  • "which the makers claims to be the first of its kind marketing method" - choppy. How about in which the film's makers claim to be the first of its kind in marketing
 Done
  • The first paragraph in Soundtrack is unsourced
 Done

There are some prose issues and some confusing sentences, but once they're all addressed this could have a chance at meeting the criteria. JAGUAR  19:10, 3 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Kailash

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  • The filming and marketing sections may be split if possible.
  • The refs need great cleanup.
  • There can be more categories.
  • "The Oscar nominee Bombay Jayashri had sung a song" - How relevant is that in "Casting"? Besides, the fact that she is an Oscar nominee should removed per WP:PUFFERY.
  • All sources' authors must be in "Last name, first name" format. Some sources lack access date.

There are just some of the issues I cannot let the GA review overlook. More will come soon. Kailash29792 (talk) 11:08, 4 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Close - not listed

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Kailash's comments haven't been addressed, and I think this is far off from meeting the criteria. I was very lenient on Bangalore Days, and I can't afford to do that again. Can you renominate it when it meets the criteria? JAGUAR  17:03, 7 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]