Talk:Larry Rivers (basketball)/GA1
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Nominator: Cielquiparle (talk · contribs) 06:56, 17 March 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: Kimikel (talk · contribs) 21:44, 4 September 2024 (UTC)
Hello @Cielquiparle: please see my GA review below. Overall, this is a well-written article with just a few things to fix before GA. Please let me know if you have any issues with my suggestions below. Thank you! Kimikel (talk) 21:44, 4 September 2024 (UTC)
- Thanks for the thoughtful and detailed review @Kimikel. I believe I've now addressed all your points below. The main challenge was the final section (as it seems the family deliberately withheld publishing further information about his children, for example), but I added a couple of facts from other articles and also changed the section heading. Cielquiparle (talk) 02:21, 5 September 2024 (UTC)
- @Cielquiparle: Firstly, thank you very much for your quick work on this. The bottom section now looks far better than before, great work. The one thing left is that my comments under the "Verifiable" section still apply to the article currently. Once that gets addressed, I can pass this article. Thank you. Kimikel (talk) 02:55, 5 September 2024 (UTC)
- @Kimikel I believe I've addressed those concerns now. Cielquiparle (talk) 03:38, 5 September 2024 (UTC)
- @Cielquiparle just went through and did a quick copyedit. The article is good to go. Thank you very much for the prompt responses, and congratulations! Kimikel (talk) 12:30, 5 September 2024 (UTC)
- @Kimikel I believe I've addressed those concerns now. Cielquiparle (talk) 03:38, 5 September 2024 (UTC)
- @Cielquiparle: Firstly, thank you very much for your quick work on this. The bottom section now looks far better than before, great work. The one thing left is that my comments under the "Verifiable" section still apply to the article currently. Once that gets addressed, I can pass this article. Thank you. Kimikel (talk) 02:55, 5 September 2024 (UTC)
Well-written
[edit]Early life
[edit]- "and lived with him" > and live with him
Education and early basketball career
[edit]- "and set records" > what kind of records? school record, conference record, etc.
- wikilink St. Joseph Gazette
Exhibition basketball career
[edit]- put quotation marks around "Clown Prince"
- "athletic team" > correct me if i'm wrong but i feel that "sports team" would sound better
- "Rivers partnered with a..." > worth mentioning that the scholarship was with MWSC
- "Curly Neal and Jerry "Lovebug" Venable and former" > Curly Neal, Jerry "Lovebug" Venable, and former
- "1985–1986 starting lineup were unable to agree on a new contract with Harlem Globetrotter management" > 1985–1986 Harlem Globetrotters starting lineup were unable to agree on a new contract with management
Personal life and death
[edit]- This section is a little anemic, perhaps consider adding some of the things people said about him after his death in this source [1]
Verifiable
[edit]- His birthdate and birthplace are never sourced in the body of the article
- Many of the newspapers in the references can be wikilinked but aren't (ie Akron Beacon, El Paso Herald-Post, etc.)
Spot check
[edit]Broad
[edit]- Broad enough
Neutral
[edit]- Neutral
Stable
[edit]- No edit-warring or the like
Illustrated
[edit]- Image is non-free; however, it meets the criteria for inclusion here
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.