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GA Review

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This review is transcluded from Talk:1806 Great Coastal hurricane/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Hurricanehink (talk · contribs) 04:24, 5 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

  • Why the "possibly" in the opening sentence?
  • "Weather historian David M. Ludlum followed the disturbance's track to the Bahamas by 19 August; intense winds continued until 21 August, however, approximately 150 mi (240 km) east of Eleuthera" - I dont get the "however" and "continued", or the location. Does that mean the hurricane remained in that area? Some clearer wording would be good.
  • "Steering currents brought the storm northward, and it approached Charleston, South Carolina on 22 August, where an easterly flow incessantly varying from northeast to southeast veering north-northeastward preceded the storm, indicated its passage far east of the city." - too verbose here. Just write exactly what happened. Remember, you don't have to write a lot to write well.
  • Did it really dissipate on the 25th? I can't read the source. Or, was it last observed?
  • "While stationed off of the New England shoreline" --> "While offshore New England". What's wrong with simple writing? It seems like you're trying to make the article longer by fluffing sentences.
  • "numerous ships experienced damage and considerable destruction to structures was observed" - it read like the ships experienced damage and destruction, which is redundant, but then I realized this is a Garden path sentence. Please fix!

All in all, a pretty good short article. This shouldn't take much time to fix :) ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 04:24, 5 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

I'm currently away from my computer, but I'll pass this later on, even if you don't get the bit about the shoreline :P Hurricanehink mobile (talk) 17:44, 5 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]